I am preparing for iBT TOEFL test - please any comments

Dear Alan,

I am a new user for this forum and i am preparing for iBT TOEFL internet based test. I see that you have beeing kindly assist members of this forum in correcting grammar mistake in their writing, which is very useful. I would like to ask if i could ask for your assistance in commenting the essay’s ideas, languague used, and organisation as well.
Since, these are the main elements, if i am not mistaken, that are marked for TOEFL.

I look forward to hear from you soon or any comments are welcome.

kind regards,

TOEFL listening lectures: A university lecture by a professor of Natural History