How do movies or television influence people’s behavior? Use reasons and specific

Nowadays television has an important role in our life. It is the biggest sources of informational background and advertisement. Television has significant influence on humanity, mainly in negative direction and small positive influence.
First of all, to make movies more attractive, production directors add scenes with violence, and show aggressive behavior. People with mental derangements maybe could not understand that it is only a movie, not real life and could apply(use) shown violent in their life. For instance, after the movie “The silence of the Lambs” in Russian was appeared maniac, whose behavior was the same like movie’s hero.
Secondly, television is an important stealer of time. In front of TV people do not fill the time, which is flying. It has bad influence on health. This time could wastes on physical exercises, which will help to improve human life.
And finally, knowledge from all aspects can gain from TV, which is a positive influence. For instance, “Discovery channel”, not only adults, but also the children have an opportunity to acquire with history of ancient civilization, learn animal behavior, see Earth from cosmos and satellites. Besides, people inform about worldwide problems, about climat. There are many educative films, which is important for youngest people.
In conclusion, movies and TV has huge influence on human beings, mainly in the negative direction as it grabs a lot of time, which could spend more useful for human health. The increasing violence in TV and movies is bed example for maniacs. Thus, humanity inform about world problems, see interesting and documentary films.

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Nowadays television has an important role in our lives. It is the biggest source of informational background and advertisements. Television has had a significant influence on humanity, mainly in a negative direction and with only small positive influences.
First of all, to make movies more attractive, production directors add scenes with violence, and show aggressive behavior. People with mental derangements maybe could not understand that it is only a movie, not real life, and could apply(use) the shown violence in their personal lives. For instance, after the movie “The silence of the Lambs” in Russian was screened, an apparent maniac surfaced , whose behavior was the same as the movie’s villain.

Secondly, television is an invasive stealer of time. In front of TV people do not use the time, which is flying by, in a constructive way. This has a bad influence on their health. This time could be used in physical exercises, which will help to improve human life.

And finally, knowledge from all aspects can be gained from TV, which is a positive influence. For instance, “Discovery channel”, brings all people an opportunity to acquaint themselves with the history of ancient civilization, learn animal behaviour, see Earth from the cosmos and satellites. Besides, people are informed about worldwide problems, about climate. There are many educational films, which are important for younger people.

In conclusion, movies and TV have made a huge influence on human beings, mainly in the negative direction, as it grabs a lot of time, which could be spent more usefully for human health. The increasing violence in TV and movies is a bad example for deranged people. Thus, humanity can be informed about world problems, see interesting and educational documentary films.

So Amoshik, my impatient friend. You were so impatient that you wrote a second essay which only makes your problems even more.
OK, you NEVER submit an essay without first seeing the edited version of your first submission. This way you will hopefully recognise your errors and omit them in your second essay. (Your second essay will have the same errors I suppose.)

OK, this work wasn’t bad, but it was badly organised. You flitted from idea to idea, which made your work appear as a jumble of random thoughts.
Please review this essay carefully. It isn’t that much better, even after editing, but it wasn’t very good to begin with. Try to incorporate the changes in any new work you submit. In the meantime you may wish to edit your second essay in the hopes of improving it.

Kitos. 7.5/10

Hello Kitosdad
I am not experienced in this forum, that is why I wrote second essay.
Thank you for your comments. I will follow closely to your advise.

Hi Emily.
Us you can see my posts are less then five, so I can’t send message to you.
It’s nice to meet an Armenian girl here, in this forum. I’m also preparing for TOEFL. When you have to pass your exam?
Whats about your essay, I really like it.