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could you pls help me in grammar of the following introduction about my company :

(X) Company is part of (Y) Group and one of the largest companies operating in the Jordanian LPG market. The company has 9 years of experience, (X) Company was established in Amman/Jordan during the year 2006. It specializes in selling and distributing products of the highest quality of propane-butane mixture. The company also specializes in bulk installations for industry, residential and commercial sectors.
main activities :

  • A well-designed feasibility studies about energy solutions.
  • Design Gas network systems, according to NFPA & other international norms.
  • Offering gas networks, filling stations, NG, LNG, SNG …etc.
  • Install gas networks, by our highly qualified engineers support through their deep knowledge and experience of gas network systems.
  • Start up gas networks & provide safety customer training on gas systems.
  • Installation of all gas safety systems.
  • Supply LPG to the customers, through huge fleet of bobtails.
  • Supply residential users by gas through gas meters and monthly invoices.
    main customers :
  • (X) Company has many customers in all sectors of Bulk gas , below the main sectors :
  • Hospitality sector (Hotels, restaurants …etc).
  • Commercial sector (malls, farms…etc)
  • Industrial sector (factories).
  • Residential sector.
  • Below the biggest customers of Unigaz Jordan :
    1- X1
    2- X2
    3- X3
    4- X4
    5- X5
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(I’ve modified a little. You may take a look at it.)

X Company is part of Y Group and one of the largest companies operating in the Jordanian LPG market. The company, which has nine years of existence, was established in Amman/Jordan during the year 2006. It specializes in selling and distributing products of the highest quality of propane-butane mixture. The company also specializes in bulk installations for industry, residential and commercial sectors.

Main activities :

  • Well-designed feasibility studies about energy solutions.
  • Designing gas network systems according to NFPA & other international norms.
  • Offering gas networks, filling stations, NG, LNG, SNG … etc.
  • Installing gas networks with the support of highly qualified engineers possessing thorough knowledge of and long experience in gas network systems.
  • Starting up gas networks and providing customer training in the safety of gas systems.
  • Installation of all gas safety systems.
  • Supply of LPG to the customers through huge fleet of bobtails.
  • Supply of gas to residential users through gas meters and monthly invoices.

Main customers :

  • X Company has a large clientele of bulk gas in all sectors, the main ones being:
  • Hospitality sector (Hotels, restaurants … etc).
  • Commercial sector (malls, farms … etc).
  • Industrial sector (factories).
  • Residential sector.

Below is a list of the biggest customers of Unigaz Jordan:
1- X1
2- X2
3- X3
4- X4
5- X5