Essay: The article states that, bread was the first grain based food in ancient

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The article states that, bread was the first grain based food in ancient time and the article provides three reasons to support it. However, the professor explains that, it was not the first grain based food and she refutes each of the author’s opinion.

First, the reading claims that, wheat could be prepared by grinding because, it was very hard to eat and people used to crush it into paste form. The professor contradicts this point by saying that, people did not grind wheat. She states that, people used to sprout the wheat in moist area. Sprouted wheat was sweat, soft and more nutritious.

Second, the article posits that, fermenting made people to bake the bread and they store it for a longer time. In contrast, the professor asserts that, fermentation was a quick process to convert wheat into bear. According to the professor, fermentation caused bubbles and foam. People discovered first bear by tasting the foam.

Finally, the reading passage says that, if paste was placed in open area than yeast spores settled on it and began fermenting the wheat and it was easier to eat when baked. However, the professor casts doubt by saying, in prehistoric times the idea to bake food was impossible because people did not bake food.

hello kitos please check my essay
has it improved?
your criticism is very important for me.

Aameera

TOEFL listening lectures: A lecture by a professor of Art

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The article states that bread was the first grain based food in ancient timeS(,) and the article provides three reasons to support it. However, the professor explains that it was not the first grain based food(,) and she refutes each of the author’s opinionS.

First, the reading claims that wheat HAD TO be prepared by grinding because, it was very hard to eat(,) and people used to crush it into paste form. The professor contradicts this point by saying that people did not grind wheat. She states that people used to sprout the wheat in A moist area. Sprouted wheat was sweatY, soft and more nutritious.

Second, the article STATED that fermenting ALLOWED people to bake the bread and they storeD it for a longer time. In contrast, the professor asserts that fermentation was a quick process to convert wheat into BEER.
According to the professor, fermentation caused bubbles and foam. People discovered THE first BEER by tasting the foam.

Finally, the reading passage says that if paste was placed in open area THEN yeast spores settled on it(,) and began fermenting the wheat(.) It was easier to eat when baked. However, the professor casts doubt by saying, in prehistoric times the idea OF bakING food was UNKNOWN(,) because people did not bake food IN THOSE DAYS.

Hello Aameera. :slight_smile: Well, it is as good as it was in your last essay. I think you would benefit greatly if you were to read more English publications. This is a sure-fire way of improving quickly.

Kitos. 7.5/10

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thanks kitos