Essay for integrated writing: Reading passage tells us about the benefits of work

Hi Kitos,
I wrote an essay for integrated writing…
Will you please evaluate it…
Advance thankyou…

Professor hardly disagrees with the reading passage. Reading passage tells us about the benefits of working in a team whereas professor points out the demerits of working in a team.
Professor quoted some of the results of one company which involves employees to work in a team. From the passage, writer mentioned that, when people work in a group there is sharing of well-developed knowledge, experience and skills. Lecturer partly agrees and mostly disagrees this idea by saying that, when people work in a group, some are tempted to be free from their work because they are either not interested or unskilled. This is because, final credit of either positive or negative goes to the entire group and not to an individual. Due to this a dedicated guy, who is talented and skilled also will not get any credit.
Secondly, an advantage from the reading passage mentioned that, group work is less time consuming, and also results in well-developed and creative solutions. Professor disagrees with this point by citing one result from the company that, group work always tends to have too many meetings and discussing about how to proceed, what to do and what not to do. This results in delay of the project work.
Finally, the merit quoted from the passage is, the guy who decides in a group feels better when compared to the situation when he works alone. Professor opposes this view by telling that, some guys will take the control over the entire group just to enjoy leadership. They will not accept to the correct idea of others and will compel others to follow their wrong idea. This will lead to the failure of the project. But still, the guy who dominated, enjoy his role, because failure is for the whole group and not only for him and he is not exposed outside for his action.

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Hi Kitos,
I wrote an essay for integrated writing…
Will you please evaluate it…
Advance thankyou…

The professor hardly disagrees with the reading passage. Reading passage tells us about the benefits of working in a team whereas the professor points out the demerits of working in a team.
Professor quoted some of the results of one company which REQUIRES employees to work in a team. From the passage, THE writer mentioned that when people work in a group there is sharing of well-developed knowledge, experience and skills. Lecturer partly agrees and mostly disagrees this idea by saying that, when people work in a group, some are tempted to be free from their work because they are either not interested or BEACAUSE THEY AREunskilled. This is because, final credit of either positive or negative goes to the entire group and not to an individual. Due to this a dedicated guy, who is talented and skilled also will not get any credit.

Secondly, an advantage from the reading passage mentionS that group work is less time consuming, and also results in well-developed and creative solutions. Professor disagrees with this point by citing one result from the company that group work always tends to have too many meetings and discussing about how to proceed, what to do and what not to do. This results in delay IN the project work.

Finally, the merit quoted from the passage is, the guy who decides in a group feels better when compared to the situation when he works alone. Professor opposes this view by telling that, some guys will take the control over the entire group just to enjoy leadership. They will not accept to the correct idea of others and will compel others to follow their wrong idea. This will lead to the failure of the project. But still, the guy who dominated, enjoy’S his role, because failure is for the whole group and not only for him and he is not exposed PUBLICLY for his action.
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Not bad Priyasathiya.

Kitos. 7.5/10