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Here is my first well-organized one essay.
Bus or Personal Car
Nowadays, Air pollution and global warming are serious issues that every civilian is concerned about. To start purifying the air, it requires to reduce the use of pollutants. Industries and personal cars are the most important keys to this human-caused problem. Industries could reduce the air pollution index by using smoke filters in their smoke stacks. By developing the technology, compare to the previous decays, the amount of pollution of personal cars, has been reduced perfectly.
However, it’s showed up that by using public transporters such as trains, subways, and buses, the amount of time and costs considerably have reduced. In most busy and overcrowded cities, using special lanes for express buses have engaged people to use them instead of their personal cars. They are fast, safe, and more reliable.
Personal cars are of course useful. The most advantage that personal cars have, is that you are the driver and you are free to choose any legal path go. Carrying Picnic and barbecue staffs within the car our own cars is a simple remainder of how useful the are. However, Traffic jams and accidents are the worse parts. Lessening the amount of fuel, and increasing the cost of the car petrol day after day are additional issues. Sleep while driving and rubbing the car are another problems that almost threat the personal car drivers.
By considering the above benefits of using buses, and to protect the earth, and decrease the air pollution, it will be better off if we use our cars whenever it is really necessary.
-Salivan
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