Countries should try to become self-sufficient in food and basic necessities.” Do

#1

With no doubt, the key step to independence in each country is its ability in providing basic needs. Basic necessities, known as food, shelter, education, and health care are landmarks that draw lines between poor and rich countries. Becoming independence in providing these necessities is fundamental for economic growth, technology advancement, and creating job opportunities in poor countries.

Being able to provide basic needs would mean spurring economic growth. A proven fact is that poor countries depend on other countries for food supply. It is said that about seventy-eight percent of food in the Africa is imported. Another fact that compounds the problem even more is food-importing countries are facing with a mounting burden of debt; therefore, should pay huge interest repayments for many years. An obvious outcome of this phenomenon is a regressed economy which leads to more poverty in these countries. Becoming self-sufficient in food production would partly contribute to economic growth and independence for them.

On the technological grounds, being independence in supplying food would give rise to other technological advancements in the country. An important point to keep in mind is that food production requires modern farming machines and industries of preserving and packaging the food. In other words, food self-sufficiency would lead to other technological progression in a country.

Hardly can one ignore the major role of self-sufficient food production in creating job opportunities. According to statistics, approximately fifty percent of young population in poor countries are unemployed and sixty percent of total population are living under the poverty line. One direct effect of basic needs self-sufficiency would be an increase in employment rate. The more crops are produced, the more farmers are needed. Also, there would be significant requirements for labors in order to construct factories, and later, many people can be employed to work in the factories. Moreover, independency in terms of education would mean low-income countries do not have to employ foreign engineers, as they have their own national ones. In other words, self-sufficiency would definitely cause a significant drop in unemployment rate.

All in all, there is no doubt that self-sufficiency in basic needs is beneficial to low-income countries, for it leads to economy growth, technology progression, and job opportunities. I hope to witness a world without poverty in the near future

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#2

/With no doubt/WITHOUT DOUBT/, the key step to independence in each country is its ability in providing THE basic needs OF ITS CITIZENS. Basic necessities, known as food, shelter, education, and health care are landmarks that draw lines between poor and rich countries. Becoming independANT in providing these necessities is fundamental for economic growth, technologICAL advancement, and creating job opportunities in poor countries.

Being able to provide ACCOMMODATE basic needs would mean spurring economic growth. A proven fact is that poor countries depend on other countries for THEIR food supplIES. It is said that about seventy-eight percent of food in the Africa is imported. Another fact that compounds the problem even more is food-importing countries are facing TODAY FACED with a mounting burden of debt; therefore, THEY WILL HAVE TO pay huge interest repayments for many years. An obvious outcome of this phenomenon is a regressed economy which leads to more poverty in these countries. Becoming self-sufficient in food production would partly contribute to economic growth and independence for them.

On the technological grounds, being SELF-SUFFICIENT in supplying food would give rise to other technological advancements in the country. An important point to keep in mind is that food production requires modern farming machines and industries CAPABLE of preserving and packaging the food. In other words, food self-sufficiency would lead to other technological progressionS in a country.

Hardly can one ignore the major role of self-sufficient food production in creating job opportunities. According to statistics, approximately fifty percent of THE youngER population in poor countries are unemployed, and sixty percent of THE total population are living under the poverty line. One direct effect of basic needs self-sufficiency would be an increase in employment rateS. The more crops are produced, the more farmers are needed. Also, there would be significant requirements for laboURErs in order to construct factories, and later, many people can be employed to work in the factories. Moreover, independency in terms of education would mean low-income countries do not have to employ foreign engineers, as they WOULD have their own national ones. In other words, self-sufficiency would definitely cause a significant drop in CURRENT unemployment FIGURES.

All in all, there is no doubt that self-sufficiency in basic needs is beneficial to low-income countries, for it leads to economIC growth, technology progression, and job opportunities. I hope to witness a world without poverty in the near future.
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KS, that was a good essay. Keep it up.

Kitos. 9/10

#3

HI,
Thanks for your correction.I am very slow in writing, It takes me about a half an a hour for writing an essay. What should I do?

#4

You don’t appear to suffer from a shortage of ideas, which is the usual complaint from students.

If I were you I would definitely concentrate on reading English publications.

If you were to become adept at reading quickly, whilst not losing track of what has been written, then the faster your brain will translate your own thoughts into written text.
If you encourage your brain to think more quickly, your writing will automatically become quicker.

That is an interesting question, and a staggering attempt to reply to it. :slight_smile: