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[color=darkred]Topic: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Classmates are a more important influence than parents on a child’s success in school. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It seem to be a automatical statement that classmates are a more important influence than parents on a child in school, because classmates spend most of their time learning and playing together. But without enough guidance and support from their parents, children are unlikely to succeed in school.
First of all, while classmates could bring benefits to each other on their learning, but children often show less restraint when facing more fancy activities, such as online games, which they might easily indulge in along with their friends from the class. By comparison, parents play a much more crucial role in keeping children from immersing overmuch in any other things but learning and ending up failing in school.
No parents would want their children to have bad performance in school, they will guide their children to make things right. A famous mother in recent years, a professor of Yale Law School, also known as “Tiger Mother”, who has reared two successful daughter in a strict and demanding method. This method includes ten disciplines of to-do and not-to-do list, all about it is to advise the children on their studying. A recent news is that one of her daughter recently recieved two enrollments from Yale and Harvard university at the same time. Although the event has evoked lots of controversies between different aspects of child-raising, but except for the controversial part, what we could infer from the event is parents indeed are a most important influence on building children. In contrast, classmates usually do not have such powerful effect on each other. Children often get together to dig in somethings just because they are cool enough, that will be good if that ‘somethings’ are of education. But if not, it should be worried by the parents.
In fact, to children’s mind, a cool thing is often not associate with education unless there is proper guidance from adults, such as parents. Not to mention the cool thing might even danger. Compare with it, by using suitable approach to rearing, children could thrive with the help of their parents, at least in school.
Additionally, a supportive parent will help their children not only to have a good school life, but to be confident enough to succeed in school. For example, children might being bullied by other classmates when they are not familiar with each other or just by the bad guy. Nothing but a tender mother and a wise father could help with that. The mother could comfort the sobbing child by offering a hearty meal, and the father then help the child to choose either fighting back or learning how to get along with the others. When children recovered with the tips, they will try to be nice to others and maybe then gain some friends in school. Along with children’s school life gets better, it will be more easier for children to get help in studying. Besides, Research demostrates that children who have great support from their parents often project enough confidence in almost every fields. In this case, for instance, when they have troubles in learning, they tend to solve the problem other than avoiding it. Better relationship and enough confidence thus lead to a better chance of success in school.
In conclusion, despite the more frequent contact with each other among classmates, it is not the classmates but the devoted parents who give out their love and support, and have more important influence that could make the children start down the right path and eventually succeed in school.
TOEFL listening discussions: A conversation between two students in their first class of the term
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