Can anybody check my text? First run your Google Earth...

English as a Second Language English Vocabulary, Grammar and Idioms
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Hi

Can anybody check my below text?

Hi There!

This is Bahram

If any body is interested to know where i am exactly working now,
Please follow below steps:

  1. First run your Google Earth
  2. and then click on attachment of this email (by the extension file name “.kmz”)

Hope to see me when I shout hi here I am!!!

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Hi,

My amendments are in CAPITALS:

Hi There!

This is Bahram MY NAME IS BAHRAM

If anybody is interested to know where exactly I AM working now,
Please follow below steps:

  1. First run Google Earth
  2. Then click on THE attachment TO this email (WITH the extension file name “.kmz”)

I hope YOU see me when I shout: Hi here I am!!!

Alan