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Both reading and lecture speak about Altruism, which exists in animals and humans in the same way. Altruism is in opposite view to selfishness. In Altruism one member of group sacrifices itself to help the others, and may be suffers from this donation.
According to the test, we can see Altruism in meerkat which is a mammal. Every time that they go outside for food one of them stands as a guard, and it watches for predators. So when guard meerket sees one of them it alarms others to run. This behavior hasn’t any benefit for it because it must eat after others. In the situation of danger it is more than others in danger because they can escape altogether, but it must ran alone.
According to the lecture, there are a lot of reasons against it. Professor said that the guard meerket not only is the first one which eats before starting its task, but also it is the first one which sees the predators, so it can ran before others. According to the lecture, animals which are responsible to find food are more prone to danger than the guard meerkets. Another example for Altruism is organ donation in human. Professor mentioned that this is not a kind of sacrificing because he received more respect for his act.
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Both readERS and lectureRS MUSE about Altruism, which exists in animals and humans in the same way. Altruism is AN opposite MEANING to selfishness. In Altruism one member of group sacrifices THEMSELVES to help the others, and maybe suffers from this donation.
According to the test, we can see Altruism in A meerkat which is a mammal. Every time that they go outside for food one of them stands as a guard, and it watches for predators.
So when THE guard meerket sees A PREDATOR it ALERTS THE others to run. This behavior hasn’t any benefit for it, because it must eat after THE others.
In A DANGEROUS SITUATION it is IN more DANGER than THE others because they can escape altogether, but it must ESCAPE alone.
According to the lecture, there are a lot of reasons against THIS PRACTICE. THE professor said that the guard meerket is NOT only the first one which eats before starting its task, but also it is the first one which sees the predators, so it can rUn before others. According to the lecture, animals which are responsible IN findING food are more prone to danger than the guard meerkets.
Another example for Altruism is THE DONATING OF ORGANS IN HUMANS.THE professor mentioned that this is not a kind of sacrificing because THE DONATOR received more respect for his act.
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Although automobile has an essential role in people’s life like helps them to enjoy from outdoor family trips or have more privacy during their transportation time, but in my view, it harms people too. Automobile discovery has changed human’s life. These days nobody can live easy in urban area without using them. However, it seems that using private car decreases people’s activity and give them new types of pollution.
First of all, people gradually get use to go everywhere with their own cars, so they forget biking and walking as other ways of transportation. Obesity is one of the major problems in the world, because people just need start their car’s engineers and begin to move, it doesn’t need any calorie consumption for them. For example, every 30 minutes walking burn 300 calories in the body which helps to lose fat and live healthier.
Secondly, cars offer people a lot of new types of pollution. Air pollution is the main problem with them. They send lead and other poisonous materials to the air that is very harmful for humanity especially children and elder population. It is one of the reasons of respiratory tract cancer, and it is the main cause of hypersensitivity and allergy too. Noise pollution is another problem, in some countries drivers horn each other for speaking with them, so people who live around the crowded streets are in risk of noise pollution. They are more agitated, can’t sleep well, and are more aggressive in stressful situation.
In conclusion, beside this truth that automobile are very useful for human, they bring a lot of problem with themselves too. They offer convenience, and they save time to spend with each other instead of spending our time in the streets, but in my opinion, it is better to forget them sometimes and use bicycle or walk to help ourselves to live healthier.
Although AN automobile /has/PLAYS/ an essential role in people’s LIVES, like helps them to enjoy from outdoor family trips or have more privacy during their transportation time, but in my view, it harms people too.
Automobile /discovery/INVENTION/ has changed human’s LIVES. These days nobody can live easyILY in AN urban area without using them.
However, it seems that using A private car decreases people’s activity and giveS them new types of pollution.
First of all, people gradually get useD to goING everywhere /with/IN/ their own cars, so they forget biking and walking as other /ways/MEANS/ of transportation.
Obesity is one of the major problems in the world, because people just need start their car’s engineers and begin to move, it doesn’t need any calorie consumption for them. For example, every 30 minutes walking burnS 300 calories in the body which helps THEM to lose fat and live healthier.
Secondly, cars offer people a lot of new types of pollution. Air pollution is the main problem with them. They send lead and other poisonous materials INto the air /that is/ AND THIS IS/ very harmful for humanity especially children and THE elderLY.
It is one of the /reasons/CAUSES/ of respiratory tract cancer, and it is the main cause of hypersensitivity and allergIES too.
Noise pollution is another problem. In some countries drivers BLOW THEIR hornS AT each other. People who live around the crowded streets are in risk of noise pollution. They are more agitated, can’t sleep well, and are more aggressive in stressful situationS.
In conclusion, beside this truth that automobileS are very useful for humanS, they bring a lot of problemS with themselves too. They offer convenience, and they save time to spend with each other instead of spending our time in the streets, but in my opinion, it is better to forget them sometimes and use A bicycle or walk to help ourselves to live healthier.
A simple essay Lida. Quite satisfactory. 7/10
Kitos
In my opinion, a distinctive student has to practice hard to achieve specific qualities. He needs to know his weakness and strength very well. However, smartness is the first step for being an extraordinary student but it isn’t enough. They need to know which kind of studying works better for them. For example some of the students learn better by writing, the others may be more comfortable by listening. Furthermore a good student needs to have good self-confidence, excellent memory, and hard working ability.
Self-confidence helps them to be more relaxed in exam days, so they can obtain better results. For example, one of my friends studies hard every day, but when the exam begins, she feels anxious, and she can’t achieve good marks. The other important specificity is good memory, which helps to remember useful subjects in suitable situations. According to the texts memory improves gradually by practicing. For example it’s a good idea to write a short note for everything that we need to memorize and repeat it in one week intervals. It is some kind of training for our mind too.
Finally, good students work hard, and they are very serious to complete their schedules. They may be awake for days to study and to memorize the subjects. They never become disappointed from bad results, and they try to find out the mistake which is responsible for each problem, then they solve it quickly.
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